Abuse
Multi-Genre
Jennifer E. Davis
English 120 Honors
Shaun Roundy
11/12/97
"Lonesome dove were not that different, you sing a sad song
but youre not alone..."
Saundra walked anxiously into the clinic. She had never been to one of these places
before. There was only one thing she had come here to find out, and she hoped that she was
wrong. The television ad said that it was all free which was the only reason why it was
even possible. Trevor sure wasnt going to offer to pay for anything. She still
couldnt believe how fast he had started ignoring her when she had told him. She
closed her eyes, swallowed hard and found herself up at the counter.
"Is this your first time here miss?"The nurse almost spat out at her.
"Yes maam it is."She stammered. The nurse handed her a clipboard. As
she reached out for it her hands were visibly shaking. She clutched the clipboard in hand
and reacted quickly to catch the dropping pen. The expression on the nursess face
changed from grotesque to sympathetic, but Saundra was too tranced to notice. She was
looking at the form she presumed she would have to fill out. There were so many questions
to answer. Reality came back into focus as the nurse gently said,
"You can take a seat over there." She pointed toward the waiting room.
Saundra slowly moved to the room and found a seat. She had just begun filling out the
questions when tears starting to brim in her azure eyes. She looked up at the ceiling,
blinked back the drops, and shook herself. She heard the calming voice of her mother very
clearly in her mind,
"No matter what happens, youll be O.K. Youve always been the strong
one, and youve proven you can get through anything." The pacifying words were
extremely familiar, she couldnt count how many times she had heard them. The whisper
of her mothers quieting voice was poignant reminder of the graveyard she was going to
visit later. This thought could have brought the tears streaming but she steeled herself
and continued on. She completed the forms question by grueling question, guessing at a few
of the answers. Then the wait began. She hadnt noticed how many others there were in
the room. She was even more amazed to find that many of them looked like they could be in
her same situation. A few of them looked even younger than she was although their
condition left them with a rounder figure than she had. She wondered if it would be very
long before she looked like that. Now she felt like crying for all of them. The cumulative
tension was almost too much to bear. Saundra could only imagine how many ulcers were
forming as they waited. The clock on the wall ticked away in cruel mocking. Slowly, the
next patient was called, and the next. She picked up a magazine and started to try and
think about something else. It didnt work. She carelessly flipped through the pages
until she saw a picture of a mother holding her baby. She knew that her actions had been
stupid, and she wished, with all of the wishes that were left inside of her, that she
could turn back time and fix her mistake. She had to wonder what life would have been like
had she not...
"Miss are you ready?" She looked up into the face of a smiling nurse and,
resigning herself to her fate, replied,
"Yes." No! Im not ready! I can barely take care of myself, how am I
going to care for a helpless child? Saundra followed the nurse down the corridor into
a small exam room. The nurse gave her something that looked like a punch cup.
"I need you to give me a urine sample." Saundra took the cup to the bathroom
and did as she was told. She came back, gave it to the nurse and sat on the exam table.
She was given a quick examination and was then led to the door.
"Well let you know what the results are in a few days." The nurse
informed her while ushering her out the door. Once outside she let a tear form and fall
down her forlorn cheek.
"What am I going to do?" She whispered to herself. Silence was the only
possible answer. Show dont tell
"Battered angel ripped and bruised, can think on better
days.."
Charice glared at the clock in wretched anger. Shed watched the hands of that
stupid clock all freakin day move slower than mlasses in the winter time. Grandma
Moses kin move faster than my afternoons. This afternoon had been nothin but
crap. The office had been so stuffed she hadnt even gotten the afternoon off that
her supervisor had promised her. Shed practically bitten some poor girls head
off too, but she didnt mean to. She was just so bone weary, she couldnt stand
it any more.
Work had just started to depress her. Charice mentally kept a check list of all the
girls that came in to be tested for pregnancy every single day. She couldnt believe
it herself until she started counting. Sometimes she wondered why she even cared, but
really she knew. Every single one of these girls had made the same stupid mistake her baby
sister had made, but instead of gettin knocked up, Kara was gonna die, from AIDS.
She still couldnt believe it. Kara had told her the night before about her test
results. Charice didnt even know that Kara was needin to be tested. And now,
Kara wanted her to help tell the rest of the famly! Charice didnt know how
Momma was gonna take it. Momma had slaved every day of their lives to make sure that they
had a better chance than she did. Now Kara done the same thing Momma had, only instead of
gettin an extra mouth ta feed they were loosin one instead. Something that no
one was gonna get none to happy over. She dreaded tellin em all, but knew Kara
couldnt do it alone. She checked the clock again. Finally!
She packed up her things, punched out, and raced to her car. She was meetin Kara
at her apartment to talk over how they were gonna tell evryone. She drove the few
blocks it took ta git to Karas. She parked fast and ran up to the door. Knock
Knock Knock! No answer. Knock Knock Knock! No answer. Cherices blood ran
cold and her heart screamed Karaaaaaaaaaaaa! She found her spare key quickly hoping
that her thoughts were far from reality. She quickly opened the door. Nothing could have
prepared her for what lay in front of her. Break the rules
"Just a city boy, born and raised in south Detroit..."
Trevor finished his laps and sat under a near by lamp post to stretch out. His thoughts
turned to the thing that had been consuming his mind for the past several weeks, Saundra.
He cringed at the thought of her. How could I be so stupid? He never wanted to hurt
her, for that matter, he didnt want to leave her, but he had to. Couldnt she
see that? Ever since his parents had died the reality of having to make it on his own came
crashing down on him. Running was the only way he could get out of the mess he was in...
Trevor was the star of his high school track team. His winnings had given him national
attention and now he had a chance to own the world. Hed been offered a full ride
scholarship at the some of the biggest universities in the country. The university he had
chosen wasnt even in this state let alone anywhere near Saundra. He ached that he
had to go, but if he didnt his whole life would turn into exactly what hed
feared the most when his parents died. College was his only chance!
"What about what you did to her..." he heard his conscience say. It
pricked until it almost bled.
"Ill work a night job so I can send her money. Maybe someday shell
have me back. Then I could give her a real life, not some poor excuse for one."
"Why dont you just take her with you?"
"Shed never want to come, besides the housing they pay for is strictly
all male. I cant afford anything else." Trevor squeezed the side of his
aching head.
"Oh, so just because you cant afford it she has to stay here and suffer,
possibly the pains of child birth, without so much as a wing and a prayer to
survive?" A drop fell from his cheek.
"...youve been forever forsaken by the one that you
love..."
The mist fell like tears down from heaven as Saundra wore the path to here
parents grave. As she glanced upward into the bleak void above her she noticed the
dancing crimson leaves on a nearby tree. A cold wind wrapped its icy fingers around
the back of her neck and held on for dear life. The smell of self mulching leaves mixed
with rain wafted up to her icy little nostrils and found their way inside. The pat...
pat... pat... pat of the rain was the only sound within her head. Afraid to
speak she stood in silence numbing herself to more than just the cold. She knew what she
had to confess. She found solace in the thought that the darkest part of the night is just
before the dawn, and it gave her the strength to start her confession.
Another small crack formed on her heart. She began to feel the ripping again upon her
soul. She began the journey of laying her naked forsaken spirit before her parents in
hopes that they would somehow have some bright ray of hope that they could give her. As
the words formed and fell from her mouth she felt as if she was eating the putrid delicacy
of vintage blubber. The words tasted of poison and salt. They slid up and down the back of
her throat, not coming out willingly. Through halting sentences and eyes swimming in pools
she bore her darkest secrets to the graves before her...hoping that these secrets might
stay here, far underneath the ground she was standing on.
With confession complete she sank to her knees and clutched the almost frozen blades of
grass, that might as well have been blades of steel. She reached out to the graves before
her and felt the cold almost imperceptibly ragged marble that she knew had absorbed
nothing. She closed her sagging eyes thinking how nice a rest would be. She again breathed
in the scent of autumn taking its course. Numb to reality, she could only feel warmth
emanating from the ground. Numb to all now, a glorious warmth created a heaviness on her
body, lulling her into a restful state. Her eyes fell a thousand miles to their temporary
destination of peace. Sensory Detail
"...life is rude, treats you bad, tears your wings away..."
Kara could hear Charice at her door, but couldnt do anything to get there. She
found herself on the floor not being able to obey her own will. The knocks she heard were
so far distant seeming almost in a dream. The light was dim, the feeling unfamiliar, and
she was slowly... losing...con..scious..ne.ssssss.
Blinking slightly Kara found herself staring into a bright light. All she could see was
white, and all she could feel was pain. She found herself wanting to retreat back into the
dark tunnel. Seeking for something not so blinding, and something else to dull the ache.
Retreating was the only viable option at this point. She couldnt see any reason for
continuing this torture. Completing her self analysis she decided it was best to just slip
back into what was such a welcoming blissful release...
"Kara, honey please dont leave us..." Where would I have to go? I am
not going anywhere bad, and Ill be back soon I promise. With the solemn vow made
she curled back up into herself to calmly wait out the storm.
Charice listened to the rain outside. What had started as a drizzle had expanded
quickly into a full blown torrent. She looked down at her sister once more. What had begun
so simple had now become something too complicated to understand. She wasnt even
sure if she was ready to try and comprehend her life without Kara. She also realized she
didnt have a choice. So sure of her life up until this time, it was a disquieting
thing to realize. Choices have a funny connection to control. Control seems to relate to
security. When choice is truly limited, there is no control, there is no security to hold
on to. So we wait only to find that the choice that could have been made to undo all that
has been done, is a choice that is not ours. No choice that could save a baby sister..no
control over her fate..no security in her life. Now there was only security in
death...something that isnt conducive to the security one would like to get used to.
Rhythm
"...took the midnight train goin anywhere..."
The fresh morning dew underneath Trevors feet was the balm of gilead to his soul.
As it soothed the callouses on his worn heals it brought healing to his wounded heart. He
could almost feel the soothing medicine on the edge of his spirit, trying to ease the
pain. That is until he remembered Saundra. Once the thought of her wrested on his soul,
there was no chance at the hurt could be prevented. Like flesh being torn from his limbs,
his mind brought back the foolish mistakes that were no longer retractable. The tears
still came when he thought about her. The baby had been brought into this world just one
week ago. He was now a father, able to pass down the mistakes that fathers make. His heart
bled as the realization hit him that he would never see this child of his. Jessica was
being put up for adoption. His heart on the verge of bursting whispered,
"What have you done?" Unwilling to suffer this cardiac arrest any
longer his mind started to race. What could be done now? Things surely couldnt be
changed at this late date, could they? Then he remembered something he loved to hear her
say. The thought had many times brought him solace.
"Tomorrow is always fresh with no mistakes in it." She said it came out of
her favorite movie, Jan of Blue Stables or something. But hed let her go. She pled
and entreated, but hed set his resolve too hard on what he thought would make him
happy. He thought it would eventually make them both happy. Surely mistakes of this
caliber were an exception to that rule? In an instant another voice entered his head,
"But what if..." For the first time since moving to this glory town
Trevor had a new vision of what his life could be like. He envisioned Saundra and he
finding each other again. What if she could still want him? What if they could keep the
baby? His resolve was set. He jumped up, ran back to his apartment, and started to pack.
He was so excited. For the first time in what felt like forever he saw things clearly, and
he was going to make things right again....Contrast
"...I know how you feel lonesome dove..."
Saundra sat in the kitchen watching the cars as they past outside her window. She
snapped out of the trance and trudged the long hall to her bathtub to begin the journey of
filling her bath. The water running, she stood almost still only moving as much as would
allow her to remove her robe. Her life for the next two hours was put on pause as she
tried to regain some fragment of will to hang on to. She closed her eyes and could see...Trevor
running his races.
"Trevor, wait for me..." Her head snapped up realizing again that
their paths were never likely to cross. She stepped slowly from her comfort, and performed
the arduous tasks of dressing, getting a glass of water, and stepping outside of her
closed off area to try and enjoy a morning walk. She rounded the corner of her sidewalk,
and turned right back around to run back to her apartment. Trevor followed suit and caught
her arm.
"Let me go!" She almost screamed.
"I already made that mistake," he whispered. "I dont want to do
that ever again." Saundra sagged against him letting tears make tracks down her face.
He took her keys from her and they went inside. He beat the path to her couch and laid her
gently down..
" Sandie...I want you back, you and the baby." He visibly cringed as he saw
any vestige of her composure crumble.
"Its too late for that, shes gone...shes already gone." His
heart wrenched inside of his body.
"Cant we get her back?"
"No we cant just get her back shes legally someone elses
now." She sagged into a pillow wishing she could just...
"Cant we just tell them it was a mistake?"
"NO mister fix it, its done, its over, shes not ours
anymore."
"Sandie, will you ever forgive me?" With anguish in her eyes she looked
directly at him.
"I dont know if I can."
Dialogue
"...take your schemes, your broken dreams, and sweep the past
away..."
Cherice sat on her favorite old chair in the living room watching the sun fall into the
mountains to sleep. The clouds were billowy and she was sure they spread all over the sky.
The dark hue of the heavy rain clouds were touched with red, orange, and purple while
spots here and there of bright blue peeked out from behind the heavy cloud curtains. She
pondered on the events of the past day, and thought just how alike her baby sister and
this sunset were.
Kara had slipped from her sleep of rest into the arms of the sleep of death. It had
happened so fast. Just as the sunset was fleeting, so had been Karas life. The red
that painted the sky was the fie that had been in her. She was so determined to make the
world work for her. It was the passion that she had for life. It was now the reminder to
Cherice of the fire that once blazed quickly reduce to a smoulder and was left now as a
cold pile of ashes warm only because of the memory.
The orange was for the light that Kara had become to everyone around her. Out of anyone
in the entire family it was definitely Kara who could have gone straight to the top. She
had the ultimate potential for scholastic success. She had the voice of a Stratvarious
violin, and the stage presence of a Goddess. All who knew her wanted to be better because
they knew her. She created in all an awareness that life is what you make it. Many were
now left in the dark to find fragments of the light now burned out.
The purple was a reminder of the depth that she carried with her. Her insight was that
of a great philosopher uncovering new truths on every turn. Only from Kara, these truths
were in their simplest of forms and werent unpretentious or pompous. Her truth would
sorely be missed.
The bright spots of blue were a reminder of her playful spirit unparalleled by any
other.
One by one the bright flashes of color disappeared. The bleak grey took over and
finished off any light that remained. How poignantly fleeting is greatness... Extended Metaphor
What Good Is The Rose Whose Thorns Are Too Thick To Reach?
Index
Show dont tell 1-2
Break the rules 3
Insight 4
Sensory detail 5
Rhythm 6
Contrast 7
Dialogue 8
Extended metaphor 9
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addresses individuals, society as a whole, sex roles, organization, social conflict, etc.
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and more people are choosing to be celibate and it shows the many positive aspects of
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that contains heath facts and presents ways by which people can create healthy lifestyles.
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Nield, John, Ph.D. of Psychology. Personal Interview. September 16th 1997.
Dr. Nield gave me a list of conditions necessary for "good" sex.
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